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The article was a bit difficult to follow, perhaps due to liberal use of 'Indian' English and missing prepositions. Sorry, I know this is meta - I would like to

by xxcode 15y ago

The article was a bit difficult to follow, perhaps due to liberal use of 'Indian' English and missing prepositions. Sorry, I know this is meta - I would like to hear what you have to say and would likely find it interesting. I would appreciate if you were to revise your writing so that it is more readable. I believe you are capable of it.

architgupta 15y ago
I am the author. Pardon the poor English. Can you give me a couple of example phrases? I'll maybe try to re-write. Another person also complained about the writing, so an opportunity to learn here. :) [Edit: I see feedback below. I'll take another pass soon.]
- random_ind_dude 15y ago
  Though I understood the points you are trying to convey, I had to go back and forth a couple of times over the article to make sense of it. You haven't organized your thoughts well. This, coupled with the use of incomplete sentences and incorrect grammar made it harder for me to understand the article. As an example consider this paragraph: > But now I am of the opinion. Figure out an unnatural advantage. Take it. Otherwise raise VC from day-one for Indian startups. Don't bootstrap because longer runways are needed. It has sentence fragments like "But now I am of the opinion.", sentences that don't make sense at first reading like "Don't bootstrap because longer runways are needed." and grammatical errors. Sorry for the harsh response, but I feel that rewriting the article will make it easier for the readers to see your points better. I'm aware that Skitt's law probably applies to my post. :)
- gizzlon 15y ago
  I'm not GP, but I found it difficult to follow as well and stopped after 2-3 paragraphs. "So here goes the question: [..]" What is the question? It was kind of difficult to get what your point was and what you where arguing. Please, just keep it simple.
- plinkplonk 15y ago
  "Also when that start-up outlier comes, Indian entrepreneurs will then do 100 such outliers immediately after that. But we have seen businesses built off the backs of decade long rounds of investment, value creation and persistence. (Shaadi, Naukri, MMT)Immediately after fast-followers followed at maturity to squeeze the juice (BharatMatrimony, ClearTrip, Yatra). Unless strong network-effects (Two-sided marketplace kind of plays), that would mean consumer plays are best approached from a brand building perspective?" I am Indian and I couldn't make head or tail of what exactly is being said here. I suspect it isn't so much "Indian English" as unclear writing. I think you are trying to say something like (I had to pause reading and think for a while) "After a market was created and validated by companies with long gestation periods, others set up very similar companies quickly to exploit it. Given this, if the business model is not dependent on network effects, it might be better to just focus on brand building" At least that is what I think you were trying to say. Coupled with somewhat odd sentence structure (But now I am of the opinion. Figure out...) , and random capitalization choices (why is the word "Restaurants" capitalized for example?) the article is a very difficult read, with very choppy idea arrangement. A rewrite might really help. (my 2 cents. posted this only because you asked for feedback)
- manojlds 15y ago
  Apart from missing words and punctuations, your paragraph formation and grouping thoughts might have to be changed. It is very tough to get what you are saying in one read. But hopefully you can take the feedback and work on it!
- johnx123-up 15y ago
  I can't understand about your clearTax site. Is it similar to http://80g.in/ http://80g.in/ ?
  - architgupta 15y ago
    ClearTax is for filing your Income Tax Returns. Its like TurboTax for India.

by xxcode 15y ago

architgupta 15y ago

I am the author. Pardon the poor English. Can you give me a couple of example phrases? I'll maybe try to re-write. Another person also complained about the writing, so an opportunity to learn here. :) [Edit: I see feedback below. I'll take another pass soon.]

random_ind_dude 15y ago
Though I understood the points you are trying to convey, I had to go back and forth a couple of times over the article to make sense of it. You haven't organized your thoughts well. This, coupled with the use of incomplete sentences and incorrect grammar made it harder for me to understand the article. As an example consider this paragraph: > But now I am of the opinion. Figure out an unnatural advantage. Take it. Otherwise raise VC from day-one for Indian startups. Don't bootstrap because longer runways are needed. It has sentence fragments like "But now I am of the opinion.", sentences that don't make sense at first reading like "Don't bootstrap because longer runways are needed." and grammatical errors. Sorry for the harsh response, but I feel that rewriting the article will make it easier for the readers to see your points better. I'm aware that Skitt's law probably applies to my post. :)
gizzlon 15y ago
I'm not GP, but I found it difficult to follow as well and stopped after 2-3 paragraphs. "So here goes the question: [..]" What is the question? It was kind of difficult to get what your point was and what you where arguing. Please, just keep it simple.
plinkplonk 15y ago
"Also when that start-up outlier comes, Indian entrepreneurs will then do 100 such outliers immediately after that. But we have seen businesses built off the backs of decade long rounds of investment, value creation and persistence. (Shaadi, Naukri, MMT)Immediately after fast-followers followed at maturity to squeeze the juice (BharatMatrimony, ClearTrip, Yatra). Unless strong network-effects (Two-sided marketplace kind of plays), that would mean consumer plays are best approached from a brand building perspective?" I am Indian and I couldn't make head or tail of what exactly is being said here. I suspect it isn't so much "Indian English" as unclear writing. I think you are trying to say something like (I had to pause reading and think for a while) "After a market was created and validated by companies with long gestation periods, others set up very similar companies quickly to exploit it. Given this, if the business model is not dependent on network effects, it might be better to just focus on brand building" At least that is what I think you were trying to say. Coupled with somewhat odd sentence structure (But now I am of the opinion. Figure out...) , and random capitalization choices (why is the word "Restaurants" capitalized for example?) the article is a very difficult read, with very choppy idea arrangement. A rewrite might really help. (my 2 cents. posted this only because you asked for feedback)
manojlds 15y ago
Apart from missing words and punctuations, your paragraph formation and grouping thoughts might have to be changed. It is very tough to get what you are saying in one read. But hopefully you can take the feedback and work on it!
johnx123-up 15y ago
I can't understand about your clearTax site. Is it similar to http://80g.in/ http://80g.in/ ?
- architgupta 15y ago
  ClearTax is for filing your Income Tax Returns. Its like TurboTax for India.