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The grammar on this page is terrible - "I'm Keeping a big Secret" - what's with the inconsistent capitalization? This page leaves me more confused and frustrat
by iamscanner 15y ago
The grammar on this page is terrible - "I'm Keeping a big Secret" - what's with the inconsistent capitalization?
This page leaves me more confused and frustrated than anything - what is your app? Why would I want to follow it on Twitter?
If you're keeping your app secret, you either shouldn't have a splash page, or should have a placeholder page with a quick sentence - even if it's just "Spread is going to revolutionize the way you share your ideas.", or something like that. As it stands, all I know is that Spread's splash page creators don't write very well.
- jeggers5 15y ago+1 for the detailed comment, thanks. Fixed the grammar and am working on some copy to replace the current text, thanks :) also, if you couldn't see the button and logo earlier, it should be fixed now if you want to take a second look, thanks :)
- jeggers5 15y agoOk, I've changed it around a bit, thoughts?
- iamscanner 15y agoIt's much clearer, but I'm a bit confused - does "Stay in the loop without having to share an email address" explain what your app will do, or is it just your way of saying "hey, follow us on Twitter"? I'm expecting that sentence to be your service's pitch.
- jeggers5 15y agoYep, that's explaining what the App does. I'll make that a little clearer now, thanks :)