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I'm a native speaker of American English. It was certainly readable, but some of the sentence constructions were stilted enough to distract me. Here's my extrem

I'm a native speaker of American English. It was certainly readable, but some of the sentence constructions were stilted enough to distract me. Here's my extremely pedantic edit, which also changes the tone to be more conversational: http://pastebin.com/f4c49579f http://pastebin.com/f4c49579f HTH :)

jimmyjim 17y ago
Thanks! And if anyone wishes to see the changes: paste both texts into http://www.quickdiff.com/index.php http://www.quickdiff.com/index.php and hit 'Compare' Okay, if any of you actually went through the exercise of pasting it onto quickdiff.com, you probably noticed how aggravating it was to copy & paste from that container. Really a bigger turn-off in terms of UI than his English skills, in my opinion.
- lewro 17y ago
  Thank you for this! I am not sure if I should change the copy now as it would probably does not make sense for people who would come later to read the article and there would be no mistakes.